Digging
EARTH QUAKE!!!!,Oh whoops just a drill I guess.So we were outside having recess when a truck came along carrying manure,we all gagged at the smell.I t was hard to believe the smell smelled soooo bad,but it did.I came back inside I had to get away from the smell blegh!just then some thing tripped me!I looked down only to see a mole hole,I thought they called pest control for those last year!So I went in to Mrs.Walker,our teacher.She said to leave it it was only one.The next day I was playing chase with Brianna and I had a felling some thing was digging through the earth.
Wow a real roller coaster of an entry. You have lots of ideas here Eva. Perhaps just focus on one idea and explore it in more detail next time.
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I really like the opening sentence of your story, it gripped my attention straight away. Good use of exclamation marks as it adds a good pace to your story. I don't really see the relevance of the manure though? Remember you only have 100 words so everything has to be linked. Also, remember to add a space after your full stops! I like how you've ended with a cliff hanger. Your story was exiting. Thanks for entering!
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