The wind blew, and Jamie watched out the window. There was a storm, and no one was aloud outside. Jamie's little brother was locked in his room. He was grounded for sneaking out of the house. Jamie was board with no little brother to play with.
During lunch time Jamie's mom told her to check on her little brother. When Jamie checked on her brother, he wasn't there. Then Jamie and her mother notified the police. Then meetings were held all over the country. Jamie was very frantic, where was her little brother?
Everyday Jamie and her family searched. But it was no use. Then one day he came back.
Well done, you have written a story which is realistic (being grounded and being bored) but it also has a twist which keeps your story interesting.I wonder where Jamie's brother had been? perhaps you could write a follow up story? Jane Team 100WC Barnsley UK
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