"Just go in for a sec," Bre says.
I sigh.
"But if I get caught..."
"You won't," Bre says slightly annoyed.
I sigh again, then head in. I hear Bre laugh, but its to late. The cave is sealed.
Knowing I can't get out, I walk on. There are drips, and strange noises. Then suddenly I see a bright light. Almost too bright. Oh gosh, I think. I'm dead.
"No you're not." A voice says.
"What. Who sai-said that?"
No reply. I see strange shawdows. I start to run. Run, run, run.
"Ann!" Bre yells,"Are you going in the cave?"
Hello Sofia,
ReplyDeleteYou have used dialogue very effectively in your story and with correct punctuation. Nicely done! I thought the photo was very tricky this week and you've added a nice bit of creativity.
One little correction - can you find the change?
"No you're not," A voice says.
Keep up the writing!
Tracey Ananmalay
Team 100WC
San José, California, US